Bring Out Your Dead

[Emprexx Plush]

Howdy folks. Since I'm reading everything lately anyway I wanna crack my critique threads back open. This one in particular is for dead/completed kids only. Winners and escapees are fine, but the purpose of this queue is to get in deep on completed stories. With that in mind I'm gonna be expanding my format a little bit from how it was in the days before Tapa, and it's been forever since I did one of these anyway so here's a refresher on what it looks like:

[+] The Process

[insert segue here] with CRITIQUE: [insert character name here]

Pretty much what it says on the tin.

THE CONCEPT

My understanding of the character from initial pitch to evolution to conclusion. I'm gonna try to keep this short and I'm open to also using this section to present and respond to your take on your character's concept? Not a requirement though, it's mostly for context.

THE QUOTES

Here I want to highlight notable quotes or bits of narrative that come up through your character's story. I'm not sure what kind of floor and ceiling I'm setting for these yet and feel free to offer your own as well if you want.

THE COMPELLING

What's getting your hooks into me? What pulls me forward and makes me want more of your character? What builds inertia for you and the characters you interact with?

THE DRAGGING

What's taking me out of your narrative? What feels like it's holding you back? What's having a negative effect on your pacing?

THE NITPICKY

What's Paige being a bitch about? What doesn't fit into the above sections? What feels like it might just be a me thing? What am I gonna meme about? What's historically a section that doesn't get utilized a lot but I'm stubbornly clinging to for value?

I'll take kids from V7 or if you've updated all the links on a character. I'm limiting the queue to five kids, first come first serve. The current queue is:

1. Abel Zelenovic (Jilly, V7)
2. Dante Valerio (Fenris, V7)
3. Johnny Lancer(Maraoone, SCDos)
4.
5.

Let's do it~

[Somersault]

Natali Greer, SC2??

[Maraoone]

Johnny Lancer, SC2 🅱ls

[Deamon]

I can't remember who I've asked you to look at before so Travis Lynch from V6

[Slam]

I'd love your thoughts on Nate Turner from v6 if you'd be so kind~

[Zetsu]

hmmm Irene Djezari would like to know what you think of her dead ass

[Emprexx Plush]

unfortunately Nate was the fifth for this queue. It's closed for this round.

[Emprexx Plush]

Wow fun fact Tapa super duper blows to read on and trying to use the new search function makes me yearn to be abducted by terrorists. I'm gonna have to make this queue V7 only; if you signed up and don't have a dead V7 kid you want me to talk about accept this token to get instantly added to a later queue of your choice. That being said, queue is open for exactly five dead kids as of this post.

[Jilly]

Can I be that bitch and ask for your Abel onions even though 99% of his content is pregame exclusive

[Emprexx Plush]

You may in fact be that bitch I have some serious Abel onions

[Fenris]

can i be ALSO that bitch and ask for your dante onions even tho u were like there for most of that i love you and u have good onions pls bless me

[Emprexx Plush]

can i be ALSO that bitch and ask for your dante onions even tho u were like there for most of that i love you and u have good onions pls bless me

Dante Thoughts:

v smely

as limp and life less as his romantic prospects before aurelien

selfish friend who hogs all the bullets

(yes i will allow it)

[dmboogie]

i hope im reading it right and your queue isnt full yet so:

could you do Daniel Whitten SCDos? his links should all be good

[Emprexx Plush]

i hope im reading it right and your queue isnt full yet so:

could you do Daniel Whitten SCDos? his links should all be good

Hnnng i am hoisted by my own precedent since i let mara request this so for this queue yes I will I guess if all links are fixed but i do not have my mojo back yet. Version hopping is super disorienting and these two in particular will be extra slow for it, future queues are v7 only until further notice

[dmboogie]

Hnnng i am hoisted by my own precedent since i let mara request this so for this queue yes I will I guess if all links are fixed but i do not have my mojo back yet. Version hopping is super disorienting and these two in particular will be extra slow for it, future queues are v7 only until further notice

understandable have a nice day