Fleurette Margot Lussier

[Lilith]

Name: Fleurette Margot Lussier
Gender: Female
Age: 18
Grade: 12
School: Saint Editha Academy
Hobbies and Interests: Ballet, learning languages and cultures, visiting museums, reading books, tutoring

Appearance: Fleurette Margot Lussier is 5’7” tall and weighs 130 pounds. The majority of her height is in her legs. She has lean but strong muscles throughout her legs due to years of dance training. Her upper body can be considered dainty in comparison to her legs, but she is still well-proportioned. She is Caucasian and has naturally pale skin.

Her face is slim. She has a pointy chin, her lips are heart-shaped and her nose is down-turned. She has brown eyes. Her wavy brown hair is cut below her chin. Her acne is principally on her cheeks, she uses concealer to cover it when she goes to school and during dance recitals. Other than that, she refrains from using makeup. Fleurette dresses modestly, preferring darker colours.

On the day of the abduction, she was wearing the normal uniform along with a pair of pearl earrings. The only other accessory she carries is a small dolphin keychain.

Biography: Fleurette Margot Lussier was born to a French diplomat, Éloïse Lussier (48) and a moderately successful romance novelist, Timothé Lussier (51) in the commune of Orléans. While her first name is Fleurette, she prefers using her middle name Margot in English settings. She was followed by her sister, Françoise (15), then her brother, Benoît (13).

As a diplomat for the French embassy, Éloïse Lussier and her family were bound to travel during Fleurette’s childhood which led to the child having little to no long lasting relationships other than her family. Growing up, she was taken care of by nannies, learning the culture of the region she resided in temporarily through them.

Timothé was an author of several romance novels and he tried to instruct his children in the way of words. Fleurette picked up reading and writing before kindergarten, and was particularly skilled at picking up languages. Her first language is French, as it is still the language spoken in the household. English quickly followed because of its status as an international language.

Her mother Éloïse took pregnancy leave for each of her children, coming back to her native Orléans for several months before returning to her travels for her diplomatic work. The constant travelling back and forth between France and foreign countries such as Germany and Russia led to Fleurette developing a deep interest in learning languages. For certain jobs, Éloïse would travel alone but would bring back gifts to her family. Fleurette particularly enjoyed books, both fictional works and documentaries. Even if she still has an accent while speaking other languages, she manages to be fluent in English, and she is capable of handling herself in German and Italian.

When her younger siblings were born, Fleurette was uninterested in them. Since they took the attention of her parents away from her, she saw them as little more than a nuisance. She quickly developed a strong sense of identity, often seeking ways to demonstrate her worth to her parents. It was because of this her mom, an ex-ballet dancer, decided to sign her up to dance lessons. Her younger sister Françoise wasn’t interested in any physical activities, which pleased Fleurette as she was the only one within the spotlight.

The dancing lessons were sometime paused due to the travelling, often leading to Fleurette missing several months of classes in her studio in Orléans. It was a detail of the matter that annoyed Fleurette since she often missed her friends and she would sometimes fall behind her peers.

Her early years were uneventful. She was good at school and maintained a high average. Timothé managed to get a couple of teaching contracts which lead to the family needing to hire nannies. None of them left a strong, lasting impression on Fleurette but she remembers them fondly due to them teaching her about the casual use of their language and culture. They were the closest things to friends she had growing up due to their constant presence in her life.

It wasn’t until she was 13 that her mother gained a long-term contract in Italy at the consulate of France in Conzensa. The family moved to the city and proceeded to live there for two years. She requested that she be enrolled in a mixed-language public school so that she could improve her language skills, and her parents agreed. It took a couple of weeks of adjustment before Fleurette was comfortable in her new environment. She enjoyed seeing her skills in language grow from the immersion. Some of the children knew a few words in English and French, which helped Fleurette adjust to her new environment quicker. It was around that time she developed a desire to visit museums. She quickly immersed herself in the Italian culture, learning about its history and language through the nanny taking care of her siblings, watching television shows and documentaries and borrowing books at the library. Her Italian wasn’t particularly good but she managed to hold conversations and was capable of reading books.

She was enrolled in a ballet studio near her school, often spending her time there during the weekends to train for the recitals. Most of the technical terms were in French and so she learned the Italian terms on the spot. It was originally a difficult experience because she fell behind her peers but as her skills in Italian grew, she managed to catch up to her fellow dancers.

She wasn’t that popular at school, but she was still a subject of curiosity from other students due to her travels. She knew these friendships wouldn’t last but she still managed to befriend few people during her two years of schooling in Italy. Fleurette fondly remembers her time in Italy, and often thinks about going to visit her old friends. They managed to stay in contact through social media.

Her relationship with her siblings were poor. She often feels like the rival of her little sister Françoise, and totally disconnected from her little brother Benoît. The former because they compete both academically and socially, and the latter because he is more interested in the world of video games than social interactions. She preferred spending time at the studio or hanging out with her friends. Her mother was often busy with work so she spent little time with her. She had a closer relationship with her father because he would be able to spend time with her in her hobbies which including visiting museums, parks, and often discussing his writing. While he had moderate success with some of his books, he is still rather unknown outside of France. Fleurette doesn’t read her father’s books because she is uninterested in the genre but she sometimes helps her father with ideas and concepts. Recently, she suggested to find a translator to translate his prior work and he has taken up the offer.

At 15, the children were told that they were moving to Britain due to Éloïse’s work. Fleurette hid her discontent because of fear of hurting her mother’s feelings, but it grew into a resentment toward her. While Fleurette enjoyed travelling and learning about new cultures and languages, she often felt it was actually a detriment due to the lack of anchors in her life. She didn’t really have many long term friends, which particularly pained her. She felt she was missing out on the normal teenager life. She has continued to keep it hidden from her family, but has been quietly musing about independence. It was at first more a daydream than an actual plan, but it solidified itself through her last year of high school.

Éloïse currently works at the consulate of France in Leeds. She lives there during the week and comes home during weekends, sometimes taking week-long breaks. Since she is missing during the weekdays, Timothé does most of the raising of the children. Since Fleurette is more independent, she is less the focus of the family since Timothé is taking care of the two younger ones. Fleurette’s life at home is a quiet if not lonely one, principally spent reading and studying.

Once arriving in Britain, Fleurette asked again to be enrolled in a public school, which led to her arrival to Saint Editha Academy. While she took time to adjust to her new surroundings, especially the accent of her peers, she has enjoyed her time at her new school. At first, she thought she wouldn’t like her uniform because it would take away her liberty when it came to choosing her clothes, but it grew on her because of its colours and how comfortable she felt in it. She also quickly became, again, a point of curiosity with her classmates due her travels. Since she is fluent in English, she is much more outgoing than when she lived in Italy. She is still modest but enjoys the company of her peers much more than she used to.

Along with the new school, she was enrolled in a new dance studio. At first she was only a student during the school year, but she decided to sign herself up as a counsellor in training for their summer camp as way to earn money doing she something she enjoyed. She started teaching dance to the smaller children as part of her CIT studies. She realized she was particularly fond of teaching, which led to her thinking about becoming a teacher. She isn’t quite sure if she is going to go through with it, but she enjoys her time as a dance teacher, and its meager pay.

In Britain, she still visits museums and other cultural hotspots. Since she now has personal funds, she is now able to buy from gift shops. Over the last few years, Fleurette started to collect keychains. She decided to collect them because of their small size, potential use, and as a way to remember the places she has been to. Her favourite one is a dolphin she received from the Bristol Aquarium. She often finds herself enjoying commuting to the locations because of the change of scenery.

Academically, she is still doing her best. Her grades are still above average due to intense studying and frequent questions to her teachers. She helps her classmates after class, tutoring in French, Literature and History. She’s doing it both for the money and to have something to put on her résumé.

Fleurette is a known figure in her year due to her experiences as a tutor and since she is the daughter of a diplomat. She is involved in committees like prom and yearbook. She joined the latter during her last year of high school, thinking about making new friends. Despite being open about the fact she won’t stay here after finishing high school, she still yearns for friendship. She wants to be closer to her peers but fears the time where she will inevitably have to leave them behind, so she keeps them at a certain distance. In a similar fashion, she avoids romantic relationships. She knows she will only hurt herself when she’ll have to leave. She has refused any proposals. She can’t deny she is attracted to her male classmates but she refuses to get attached in such a way. She wants to stay in contact with her new British friends, just like with her Italian friends through social media.

Currently, Fleurette’s only plan after high school is moving back to her hometown in France. While she loves her family, she is getting tired of travelling around. She has been saving up money for when she moves out and she plans to live with her grandparents. Other than counting down the days until graduation, Fleurette hasn’t talked about to her plans to her parents just yet. She is waiting for the summer break to announce her plan to move back to Orléans. She wants to explore the possibility of becoming an English teacher. While her future is rather indeterminate, she is excited to settle down. She plans to continue dancing and going to museums.

Advantages: Fleurette has a reputation due to her tutoring and the job of her mother, she can potentially leverage that to earn allies. Her years of dancing have granted strength in her lower body and stamina. She is rather book smart.
Disadvantages: While Fleurette is an apt dancer, she lacks in upper body strength. Her body can be best described as fragile and it could undermine her chance of success. Despite being fluent in English, her accent and potentially her phrasing might lead to miscommunication between the participants. Finally, she lacks personal experiences, which means she lacks the potential street smarts she might need.

[Cactus]

Ahoy Lore! Welcome to PV3. It's me, Cactus - and you get to be my first profile as a mini staffer. I'm stoked. I hope you are too.

At first glance, I really like Fleurette. I harken back to my olden V1 days where we had a ballerina who ended up being a fairly memorable character, and you've got a really good start on what could be a present-day one. With that being said, we've got a couple of things to do before I can let Fleurette through, so she's DENIED for now.

A quick note about how I've decided to roll my critiques - I do things a bit differently just because it's the way my brain works. I use footnotes and highlighting throughout, so that hopefully things are easily identifiable for you to pick up on. Don't sweat it if there are large portions highlighted - it probably just means I'd like some more fleshing out. I use green for little grammary things that I notice and yellow for things I'd like fleshed out. Sometimes I'll cross out a word and highlight it in green - these'll just be straightforward. Any additional stuff that is general, I'll toss in blue at the end.

So let's rock and roll!

Name: Fleurette Margot Lussier
Gender: Female
Age: 18
Grade: 12
School: Saint Editha Academy
Hobbies and Interests: Ballet, learning languages and cultures, visiting museums, reading books, tutoring, yearbook club²⁵

Appearance: Fleurette Margot Lussier is 5’7” tall and weighs 130 pounds. The majority of her height is in her legs. Despite the strength in her legs, her upper body can be considered dainty.¹ She is Caucasian and has a natural pale skin².

Her face is slim. She has a pointy chin, her lips are heart-shaped and her nose is down-turned. She has brown eyes. Her wavy brown hair is cut below her chin. Her acne is principally on her cheeks, she uses concealer to cover it when she goes to school and during dance recitals. Other than that, she refrains from using makeup. Fleurette dresses modestly, preferring darker colours.

On the day of the abduction, she was wearing the normal uniform along with a pair of pearl earrings.

Biography: Fleurette Margot Lussier was born to a French diplomat, Éloïse Lussier (48) and romance novelist, Timothé Lussier (51) in the commune of Orléans. While her first name is Fleurette, she prefers using her middle name Margot in English settings. She was followed by her sister, Françoise (15), then her brother, Benoît (13).

As a diplomat for the French embassy, Éloïse Lussier and her family were bound to travel during Fleurette’s childhood which led to the child having little to no long lasting relationship³ other than her family. Growing up, she was taken care of by nannies, learning the culture of the region she resided in temporarily through them.

Timothé was an author of several romance novels and he tried to instruct his children in the way of words. Fleurette picked up reading and writing before kindergarten, and was particularly skilled at picking up languages.⁴

Her mother Éloise took pregnancy leave for each of her children, coming back to her native France city⁵ for several months before returning to travelling to countries for her diplomatic work. The constant travelling back and forth between France and foreign countries led to Fleurette developing a deep interest in learning languages.⁶ Even if she still has an accent while speaking other languages, she manages to be fluent in English and she is capable to handle⁷ herself in German and Italian.

When her younger siblings were born, Fleurette was uninterested of⁸ them. She felt them more as a nuisance than anything else since they took attention of her parents from her.⁹ She quickly developed a strong sense of identity, often seeking ways to demonstrate her worth to her parents. It was because of that her mom, an ex-ballet dancer, decided to sign her up to dance lessons. Her younger sister, Françoise, wasn’t¹⁰ interested in any physical activities which pleased Fleurette.

The dancing lessons were sometime paused due to the travelling, often leading to Fleurette missing several months of classes in her studio in Orléans. It was a detail of the matter that annoyed Fleurette since she often missed her friends and she would often fall behind her peers.

Her early years were quiet moments of learning at the local French school.¹¹ She was good at school and maintained a high average through her younger years. Timothé managed to get a couple of teaching contracts which lead to the family to hire¹² nannies. None of them left a strong, lasting impression on Fleurette but she remembers them fondly due to them teaching her about the casual use of their language and culture. They were the closest things to friends growing up due to their constant presence in her life.

It wasn’t until she was 13 that her mother gained a long-term contract in Italy at the consulate of France in Conzensa. The family moved to the city and proceeded to live there for two years. She wasn’t enrolled at a French school due to her requesting to be allowed in a public school.¹³

It was around that time she developed a desire to visit museums. She quickly immersed herself in the Italian culture, learning about its history and language through the nanny taking care of her siblings, watching televisions and documentaries and borrowing books at the library.

She was enrolled in a ballet studio near her school, often spending her time there during the weekends to train for the recitals. Her Italian wasn’t particularly good but she managed to hold conversations and was capable of reading books.¹⁴

She wasn’t that popular at school, but she was still a subject of curiosity of other students due to her travels. She knew these friendships wouldn’t last but she still managed to befriend people during her two years of schooling in Italy. The two years she spent there are fond to her, often thinking about visiting them.¹⁵ They managed to stay in contact through social media.

Her relationships with her siblings was poor. She often feels like the rival of her little sister Françoise and totally disconnected from her little brother Benoît. She preferred spending time at the studio or hanging out with her friends. Her mother was often busy with work so she spend¹⁶ little time with her. She had a closer relationship with her father because he would be able to spend time with her in her hobbies which including visiting museums, parks, and often discussed¹⁷ his writing.

At 15, the children were announced¹⁸ that they were moving to Britain due to Éloïse’s work. Fleurette hid her discontent because of fear of hurting her mother’s feelings, but it grew into resentment toward her. While Fleurette enjoyed travelling and learning about new cultures and languages, she often felt it was actually a detriment due to her lack of anchors in her life. She didn’t really have many long term friends, which particularly pained her. She felt she was missing out on the normal teenager life. She continues to keep it hidden from her family, but has been quietly musing about independence¹⁹.

Éloïse currently works at the consulate of France in Leeds. She lives there for during the week and comes home during weekends and sometimes taking week²⁰ breaks. Since she is missing during the week days, Timothé does most of the raising of the children. Since Fleurette is independent, she is less the focus of the family since Timothé is taking care of the two younger ones. Fleurette’s life at home is a quiet if lonely one, principally reading and studying.

Fleurette asked again to be enrolled in a public school, which led to her arrival to Saint Editha Academy. While she took time to adjust to her new surroundings, especially the accent of her peers, she enjoys her time at her new school. At first, she thought she wouldn’t like her uniform, but it grew on her.²¹ She also quickly became, again, a point of curiosity with her classmates due her travels. Since she is fluent in English, she is much more outgoing than when she lived in Italy. She is still modest but enjoys the company of her peers much more than she used to.

Along with the new school, she was enrolled in a new studio. She started teaching dance to children as a helper for her teachers. She realized she was particularly fond of teaching which led to her thinking about becoming a teacher. She isn’t quite sure if she is going to go through it, but she enjoys her time as a dance teacher, and its meager pay.²²

She still visits museums and other cultural hotspots. Since she has personal funds, she can now buy from gift shops. She is currently collecting keychains.²³ She often finds herself enjoying commuting to the locations because of the change of scenery. The whole experience is enjoyable for Fleurette.

Academically, she is still doing her best. Her grades are still above average due to intense studying and frequent questions to her teachers. She helps her classmates in after class tutoring in French, Literature and History. She’s doing it both for the money and to have something to put on her résumé.

Fleurette is a known figure in her year due to her experiences as a tutor and since she is the daughter of a diplomat. Despite being open about the fact she won’t stay here after finishing high school, she is still involved in committees like prom and yearbook. She joined the latter during her last year of high school, thinking about making new friends.

Currently, Fleurette’s only plan after high school is moving back to her hometown in France. She plans to live with relatives, her grandparents, and explore the possibility to²⁴ become an English teacher. While her future is rather indeterminate she is excited to settle down. She plans to continue dancing and going to museums.

Advantages: Fleurette has a reputation due to her tutoring and the job of her mother, she can potentially leverage that to earn allies. Her years of dancing have granted strength in her lower body and stamina. She is rather book smart.
Disadvantages: While Fleurette is an apt dancer, she lacks in upper body strength. Her body can be best described as fragile and it could undermine her chance of success. Despite being fluent in English, her accent and potentially her phrasing might lead to miscommunication between the participants. Finally, she lacks personal experiences, which means she lacks the potential street smarts she might need.

Appearance:

¹: I'd love to see a bit more fleshing out of her body type. We know that she's very leggy, but that doesn't necessarily mean that her legs are strong. Does she have more muscular calves, does she possess lean muscle or is she like a Chun-Li sort where she's standing on tree-trunks? I'd also like to see a bit more about her dainty upper half. Is she overly thin, does her strong lower half and disproportionate upper half make her look awkward, or is she well-proportioned?
²: "a natural pale skin" should be "naturally pale skin".

Biography:

³: should be "relationships"
⁴: What was Fleurette's native language? Was she brought up learning French, and then English as well, or did she learn this later? I'd like to get a bit more with which language her father writes in, and which one she learned first. I know you go a bit more into it in the next paragraph but it'd help make this one a bit clearer.
⁵: I would guess this is supposed to be Orléans?
⁶: Could you be specific on which countries? I think it would help enhance the biography, particularly because the Program universe has a very different political climate to our world's.
⁷: should be "capable of handling"
⁸: should be "in"
⁹: This sentence is just a little awkward to me - I would rearrange it to read something like: "Since they took the attention of her parents away from her, she saw them as little more than a nuisance."
¹⁰: You don't need the commas here, so you can remove them, but I would add one after "activities" in the same sentence.
¹¹: This sentence is a bit awkward - are you meaning to say that her early years were uneventful?
¹²: Seems that we have a missing word here - "needing to" or "having to" or something like that would work.
¹³: Did this give her more of an appreciation for her abilities to speak other languages? Did the other children primarily speak Italian, or English, or something else? Did she have a difficult time adjusting at this point in her life? I'd like this to be fleshed out a bit more.
¹⁴: I feel like this sentence works a bit better in the paragraph preceding it, as it works to flesh that point out. At the same time, I'd like a bit more on how she found training at an Italian dance academy with a rocky understanding of English? Was she okay with it? Motivated? Frustrated?
¹⁵: This sentence reads a bit awkward, something like "Fleurette fondly remembers her time in Italy, and often thinks about going to visit her old friends." might work.
¹⁶: should be "spent"
¹⁷: should be "discussing"
¹⁸: should be "told"
¹⁹: I think this is a really important point that I'd love to see just a little more on - how is she considering independence? Is she just counting down the days until she can go away to school? Is she considering emancipation from her parents? Does she have any real plans on how this will happen or is it more just daydreaming about the day when she can get away?
²⁰: should be "week-long"
²¹: What was it about the uniform that originally had her dreading wearing it? What eventually caused her to warm up to it?
²²: This is something that I'd like to see fleshed out a lot more. Having a job as a teen can be a really crappy experience, but if you suddenly realize that your part-time job could maybe lead to something like a career, that's a bit more of a profound thing to have happen in one's life. Could you elaborate on what it is about teaching she likes? How did she get the opportunity? Was it something that she volunteered for, or did she seek it out? Did she have to apply? I'd like to see a bit more on this.
²³: Why keychains? Does she carry them around or is does she keep them at home? Does she have a favourite, or a lucky one, or just one that means more to her? I get collecting weird stuff as I personally collect shot glasses as they're easy to store and they're a reminder of cities I've been to, so a bit more on this would be cool.
²⁴: "to" should be "of" and I think you might want to change it to "becoming"

Vitals:

²⁵: I'd like just a bit more on the yearbook club thing - or you can remove it altogether from the hobbies. It only comes up at the very last part of the profile, so if it's important enough to be a hobby, I'd love to see a bit more about it.

Other:

26: The only thing that I don't see in the profile that I'd like to know a bit more about are a bit more details on Fleurette's relationships. Is she someone who makes friends easily, or does she keep people at a distance knowing that she's going to be leaving? You touch on it briefly at the end but I'd like to know how she's found public school. Does she fit in well, or is she awkward? Is she comfortable in social settings or does she have trouble?
27: Finally, I'd like to know about what Fleurette thinks regarding dating. Is she interested in men? Women? Has she just decided to put that on the back-burner? Has she ever experimented? Dated? Anything like that? A bit more on that.

I know it seems like a daunting list, but a lot of it is just small grammar stuff. You've got a good profile here, and I'd like to make sure she gets the proper amount of lovin' so we can sign her up for PV3. Let me know when you've addressed the notes!

[Lilith]

je l'ai fait.

[Cactus]

Hey Lore - these edits are great, thank you for making them. As we discussed, I'm gonna do the same thing but it's gonna be more of a grammar tidy. Anything I may have missed last night I'll highlight in yellow, otherwise it'll just be green.

Name: Fleurette Margot Lussier
Gender: Female
Age: 18
Grade: 12
School: Saint Editha Academy
Hobbies and Interests: Ballet, learning languages and cultures, visiting museums, reading books, tutoring

Appearance: Fleurette Margot Lussier is 5’7” tall and weighs 130 pounds. The majority of her height is in her legs. She has lean but strong muscles throughout her legs due to years of dance training. Her upper body can be considered dainty in comparison to her legs, but she is still well-proportioned. She is Caucasian and has naturally pale skin.

Her face is slim. She has a pointy chin, her lips are heart-shaped and her nose is down-turned. She has brown eyes. Her wavy brown hair is cut below her chin. Her acne is principally on her cheeks, she uses concealer to cover it when she goes to school and during dance recitals. Other than that, she refrains from using makeup. Fleurette dresses modestly, preferring darker colours.

On the day of the abduction, she was wearing the normal uniform along with a pair of pearl earrings. The only other accessory she carries is a small dolphin keychain.

Biography: Fleurette Margot Lussier was born to a French diplomat, Éloïse Lussier (48) and romance novelist, Timothé Lussier (51) in the commune of Orléans. While her first name is Fleurette, she prefers using her middle name Margot in English settings. She was followed by her sister, Françoise (15), then her brother, Benoît (13).

As a diplomat for the French embassy, Éloïse Lussier and her family were bound to travel during Fleurette’s childhood which led to the child having little to no long lasting relationships other than her family. Growing up, she was taken care of by nannies, learning the culture of the region she resided in temporarily through them.

Timothé was an author of several romance novels and he tried to instruct his children in the way of words. Fleurette picked up reading and writing before kindergarten, and was particularly skilled at picking up languages. Her first language is French, as it is still the language spoken in the household. English quickly followed because of its status as an international language.

Her mother Éloïse took pregnancy leave for each of her children, coming back to her native Orléans city for several months before returning to travelling to countries her travels for her diplomatic work. The constant travelling back and forth between France and foreign countries such as Germany and Russia led to Fleurette developing a deep interest in learning languages. For certain jobs, Éloïse would travel alone but would bring back gifts to her family. Fleurette particularly enjoyed books, both fictional works and documentaries. Even if she still has an accent while speaking other languages, she manages to be fluent in English, and she is capable to of handling herself in German and Italian.

When her younger siblings were born, Fleurette was uninterested in them. Since they took the attention of her parents away from her, she saw them as little more than a nuisance. She quickly developed a strong sense of identity, often seeking ways to demonstrate her worth to her parents. It was because of this that her mom, an ex-ballet dancer, decided to sign her up to for dance lessons. Her younger sister Françoise wasn’t interested in any physical activities, which pleased Fleurette.

The dancing lessons were sometime paused due to the travelling, often leading to Fleurette missing several months of classes in her studio in Orléans. It was a detail of the matter that annoyed Fleurette since she often missed her friends and she would oftensometimes fall behind her peers.

Her early years were uneventful. She was good at school and maintained a high average through her younger years. Timothé managed to get a couple of teaching contracts which lead to the family needing to hire nannies. None of them left a strong, lasting impression on Fleurette but she remembers them fondly due to them teaching her about the casual use of their language and culture. They were the closest things to friends she had growing up due to their constant presence in her life.

It wasn’t until she was 13 that her mother gained a long-term contract in Italy at the consulate of France in Conzensa. The family moved to the city and proceeded to live there for two years. She requested that she be enrolled in a mixed-language public school so that she could improve her language skills, and her parents agreed. It took a couple of weeks of adjusting before Fleurette was comfortable in her new environment. She enjoyed seeing her skills in language grow from the immersion. Some of the children knew a few words in English and French, which helped Fleurette adjust to her new environment quicker. It was around that time she developed a desire to visit museums. She quickly immersed herself in the Italian culture, learning about its history and language through the nanny taking care of her siblings, watching televisions shows and documentaries and borrowing books at the library. Her Italian wasn’t particularly good but she managed to hold conversations and was capable of reading books.

She was enrolled in a ballet studio near her school, often spending her time there during the weekends to train for the recitals. Most of the technical terms were in French and so she learned the Italian terms on the spot. It was originally a difficult experience because she fell behind her peers but as her skills in Italian grew, she managed to catch up to her fellow dancers.

She wasn’t that popular at school, but she was still a subject of curiosity of from other students due to her travels. She knew these friendships wouldn’t last but she still managed to befriend a few people during her two years of schooling in Italy. Fleurette fondly remembers her time in Italy, and often thinks about going to visit her old friends. They managed to stay in contact through social media.

Her relationships with her siblings were poor. She often feels like the rival of her little sister Françoise and totally disconnected from her little brother Benoît. She preferred spending time at the studio or hanging out with her friends. Her mother was often busy with work so she spent little time with her. She had a closer relationship with her father because he would be able to spend time with her in her hobbies which including visiting museums, parks, and often discussing his writing.

At 15, the children were told that they were moving to Britain due to Éloïse’s work. Fleurette hid her discontent because of fear of hurting her mother’s feelings, but it grew into a resentment toward her. While Fleurette enjoyed travelling and learning about new cultures and languages, she often felt it was actually a detriment due to herthe lack of anchors in her life. She didn’t really have many long-term friends, which particularly pained her. She felt she was missing out on the normal teenager life. She has continued to keep it hidden from her family, but has been quietly musing about independence. It was at first more a daydream than an actual plan, but it solidified itself through her last year of high school.

Éloïse currently works at the consulate of France in Leeds. She lives there during the week and comes home during weekends, sometimes taking week-long breaks. Since she is missing during the weekdays, Timothé does most of the raising of the children. Since Fleurette is more independent, she is less the focus of the family since Timothé is taking care of the two younger ones. Fleurette’s life at home is a quiet if not lonely one, principally spent reading and studying.

Once arriving in Britain, Fleurette asked again to be enrolled in a public school, which led to her arrival to Saint Editha Academy. While she took time to adjust to her new surroundings, especially the accent of her peers, she has enjoyed her time at her new school. At first, she thought she wouldn’t like her uniform because it would take away her liberty when it came to choosing her clothes, but it grew on her because of its colours and how comfortable she felt in it. She also quickly became, again, a point of curiosity with her classmates due her travels. Since she is fluent in English, she is much more outgoing than when she lived in Italy. She is still modest but enjoys the company of her peers much more than she used to.

Along with the new school, she was enrolled in a new dance studio. At first she was only a student during the school year, but she decided to sign herself up as a counsellor in training for their summer camp as way to earn money doing she something she enjoyed. She started teaching dance to the smaller children as a helper for her teachers part of her CIT duties. She realized she was particularly fond of teaching, which led to her thinking about becoming a teacher. She isn’t quite sure if she is going to go through with it, but she enjoys her time as a dance teacher, and its meager pay.

In Britain, she still visits museums and other cultural hotspots. Since she now has personal funds, she can now is able to buy from gift shops. Over the last few years, Fleurette started to collect keychains. She decided to collect them because of their small size, potential use, and as a way to remember the places she has been to. Her favourite one is a dolphin she received from the Bristol Aquarium. She often finds herself enjoying commuting to the locations because of the change of scenery.

Academically, she is still doing her best. Her grades are still above average due to intense studying and frequent questions to her teachers. She helps her classmates in after class, tutoring in French, Literature and History. She’s doing it both for the money and to have something to put on her résumé.

Fleurette is a known figure in her year due to her experiences as a tutor and since she is the daughter of a diplomat. She is involved in committees like prom and yearbook. She joined the latter during her last year of high school, thinking about making new friends. Despite being open about the fact she won’t stay here after finishing high school, she still yearns for friendship. She wants to be closer to her peers but fears the time where she will inevitably have to leave them behind, so she keeps them at a certain distance. In a similar fashion, she avoids romantic relationships. She knows she will only hurt herself when she’ll have to leave. She has refused any proposals. She can’t deny she is attracted to her male classmates but she refuses to get attached in such a way. She still ,however, wants to stay in contact with themher new British friends, just like with her Italian friends through social media.

Currently, Fleurette’s only plan after high school is moving back to her hometown in France. While she loves her family, she is getting tired of travelling around. She has been saving up money for when she moves out and she plans to live with relatives, her grandparents. Other than counting down the days until graduation, Fleurette hasn’t talked about to her plans to her parents just yet. She is waiting for the summer break to announce her plan to move back to Orléans. She wants to explore the possibility off becoming an English teacher. While her future is rather indeterminate, she is excited to settle down. She plans to continue dancing and going to museums.

Advantages: Fleurette has a reputation due to her tutoring and the job of her mother, she can potentially leverage that to earn allies. Her years of dancing have granted strength in her lower body and stamina. She is rather book smart.
Disadvantages: While Fleurette is an apt dancer, she lacks in upper body strength. Her body can be best describe das fragile and it could undermine her chance of success. Despite being fluent in English, her accent and potentially her phrasing might lead to miscommunication between the participants. Finally, she lacks personal experiences, which means she lacks the potential street smarts she might need.

The vast majority of these are small grammar fixes and some things I've moved around for flow purposes. Most of them should be straightforward. Only three final things I'd like to see expanded a bit:

1) Why did her sister's lack of interest in dance please Fleurette? Even if it's a simple explanation, I'd just like a quick note as to why.
2) Is there any particular reason that she feels this rivalry with her sister? Why does she dismiss her younger brother? What causes her to have these feelings aside from feeling that they intruded upon her relationship with her folks?
3) When she discusses her writing with her father, what do they talk about? Do they always agree? Do they argue? Just a bit more elaboration would be great.

Let me know when you've addressed these!

[Lilith]

bip bop

[Cactus]

Looks good to me!

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